Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Now with the development of science and technology online shopping is becoming more and more convenient, do you think online shopping is better or worse? In my

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I think online shopping is good. Why

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online shopping is good?

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I said that. The first one is online shipping is more convenient. Since most people are busy or lazy these days, they don’t want to spend

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shopping, or sometimes they don’t have goods on site and go back, which is

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you can price compare because

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online you

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buy a thing and there have same stuff but different

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so you can save

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money. The third is

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range of

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, sometimes when you go to

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shopping they only have the thing they incoming goods but online is different you can have more

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online shopping will

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dangerous.

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you may buy

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fake things

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online but to shop online, you have to take certain risks and responsibilities. If you have the first

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you will be careful the next

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. I think shopping online is very convenient and it can save us a lot of

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Topic Vocabulary:

convenience
time-saving
wide selection
competitive prices
discounts
accessibility
global marketplace
availability
fraud
scams
lack of
physical interaction
personal experience
impersonal
customer service
delays
delivery
return process

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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

in the past, people wore their traditional clothes and followed their cultures. these days, most people wear similar clothes and therefore look very similar to one another. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problems does the shortage of fresh water cause? What measures could be taken to overcome these problems? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some believe that going to university is the best route to a successful career. While others believe that is it better to start work straight after high school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

it is the responsibility of schools to teach children good behaviours in addition to providing formal education. to what extent do you agree or disagree?