Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Now with the development of science and technology online shopping is becoming more and more convenient, do you think online shopping is better or worse? In my

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I think online shopping is good. Why

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online shopping is good?

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several

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I said that. The first one is online shipping is more convenient. Since most people are busy or lazy these days, they don’t want to spend

time

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shopping, or sometimes they don’t have goods on site and go back, which is

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time

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. Second

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you can price compare because

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online you

want

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buy a thing and there have same stuff but different

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prices

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so you can save

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money. The third is

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range of

product

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products

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, sometimes when you go to

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a store

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shopping they only have the thing they incoming goods but online is different you can have more

choice

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. But some people will say

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online shopping will

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dangerous.

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you may buy

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fake things

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online but to shop online, you have to take certain risks and responsibilities. If you have the first

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you will be careful the next

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so next

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. I think shopping online is very convenient and it can save us a lot of

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. But there’s

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amount of risk.

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You presented a personal opinion, which is important in Task 2 essays.

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You successfully enumerated several advantages of online shopping.

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Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

convenience
time-saving
wide selection
competitive prices
discounts
accessibility
global marketplace
availability
fraud
scams
lack of
physical interaction
personal experience
impersonal
customer service
delays
delivery
return process

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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. What are the causes? Suggest some measures to reduce traffic in big cities.

Science is beneficial for society, so science students should get more support. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In most countries fast food is becoming cheaper and more available. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

More and more people and organizations are using digital technology for contact with other people. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using digital technology for communication and does advantages outweigh disadvantages?

Many people use distance learning programmes to study at home, but others think that it cannot bring the benefits as much as attending collage or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree.