Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?
Now with the development of science and technology online shopping is becoming more and more convenient, do you think online shopping is better or worse? In my
opinion
I think online shopping is good.
Why Add a comma
opinion,
I think
online shopping is good? Add an auxiliary verb
do I think
did I think
There’re
several Correct your spelling
There are
reason
I said that. The first one is online shipping is more convenient. Since most people are busy or lazy these days, they don’t want to spend Change to a plural noun
reasons
time
shopping, or sometimes they don’t have goods on site and go back, which is waste
of Correct article usage
a waste
time
. Second is
you can price compare because Unnecessary verb
apply
in
online you Change preposition
apply
want
buy a thing and there have same stuff but different Add the particle
want to
price
so you can save Fix the agreement mistake
prices
your
money. The third is Correct pronoun usage
apply
wide
range of Correct article usage
the wide
product
, sometimes when you go to Fix the agreement mistake
products
store
shopping they only have the thing they incoming goods but online is different you can have more Correct article usage
a store
choice
.
But some people will say Fix the agreement mistake
choices
the
online shopping will Correct article usage
apply
have
dangerous. Verb problem
be
For
example
you may buy Add a comma
example,
the
fake things Correct article usage
apply
in
online but to shop online, you have to take certain risks and responsibilities. If you have the first Change preposition
apply
time
that
you will be careful the next Correct word choice
apply
time
so next time
need to be more caution
.
I think shopping online is very convenient and it can save us a lot of Replace the word
cautious
time
. But there’s certain
amount of risk.Change the article
a certain
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