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The bar chart below shows the number of films produced of five countries in three years

The bar chart below shows the number of films produced of five countries in three years
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The information about the number of movies made in five nations in the given
years
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 is depicted in the given bar graph. The information is calibrated in the form of
percenatge
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percentage
percentages
. The most striking feature of the chart is that
country
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 A has shooted maximum films,
while
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 the minimum movie projects were completed by
country
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 E in all
years
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. In terms of
country
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 A, 88%
films
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of films
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 were released in the
years
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 2007 and 2008 which is 38% significantly higher than
country
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 B in the same
years
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. Later, in 2009, a noticeable difference of 10% in movie making can be seen between
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country
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countries
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 A and B as the former had a figure of 80% and the latter 70%. Moving to
further
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 details, in 2007,
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country
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countries
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 C and E
made
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smallest
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the smallest
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 percentage of movies
whereas
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 in 2009
this
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 figure was higher than 10% in all three countries.
Lastly
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,
country
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 C filmed 2% more movies than
country
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 D and E which were noted as nearly 10%.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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