The three pie chart illustrate howmany hours students spend in the library in British university.
The given pie charts show the proportion of students by time spent in the
library
at Use synonyms
the
British university. Correct article usage
a
Overall
, "1 to 7" was the largest segment among undergraduates Linking Words
while
"15+" was the most comprised segment among postgraduates.
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To begin
with, in respect of all students, half of the students spent 1 to 7 Linking Words
hours
in the Use synonyms
library
. Use synonyms
Following
Linking Words
this
, 35% answered 8 to 14 Linking Words
hours
, and only 15% stayed in the Use synonyms
library
for more than 15 Use synonyms
hours
.
When it comes to the undergraduates, 63% of them studied or read books in the Use synonyms
library
from 1 to 7 Use synonyms
hours
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, 28% of them answered 8 to 14 Linking Words
hours
, and only 9% stayed in the Use synonyms
library
over 15 Use synonyms
hours
. Use synonyms
However
, almost half of the postgraduates(51%) spent more than 15 Linking Words
hours
a day in the Use synonyms
library
. Use synonyms
Following
Linking Words
this
, 8 to 14 Linking Words
hours
comprised 32% and 1 to 7 Use synonyms
hours
constituted only 17%. Use synonyms
To sum up
, the postgraduates tend to stay longer in the Linking Words
library
compared to the undergraduates.Use synonyms
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