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Save The Graph shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Save The Graph shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The given graph illustrates the average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, the CO2 emission rate of the United Kingdom showed a downward trend
while
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 those of Italy and Portugal depicted an upward trend throughout the given timeframe.
First,
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COZ emissions in the UK stood at around 11 metric
tons
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 in 1967.
Next,
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it constantly decreased and reached about 9
tons
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 in 2007. When it comes to the figure for Sweden, it started from approximately 8
tons
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 in the beginning and peaked at 10
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 in 1977.
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, it dramatically declined after a decade and reached 7
tons
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.
Subsequently
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, it dropped slightly and became the least country which emits the CO2, with less than 5
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.
However
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, CO2 emissions in Italy
was
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 almost 4
tons
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 in 1967. It gradually rose until it reached about 7
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 in 1967. After that, it levelled out for the next decade.
Lastly
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, the amount of CO2 emission in Portugal was below 2
tons
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 in 1967.
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, it significantly grew to 5
tons
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 in 1997.
Following
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this
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, it rose marginally in 2007, to about 5.2
tons
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words co, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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