The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present.

The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present.
The line graph compares the
number
of library
books
read by male students and female students at Starmouth School between 2009 and 2012. To summarize, both the numbers of
books
men and women had risen in 2012 compared to 2009. The
number
of
the
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readers the
boys
had was higher than the
girls
initially
,
however
, the
girls
had
the
Correct article usage
a
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greater
number
of
books
read than the
boys
in 2012.
Number
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A number
The number
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of
books
the
boys
read had
a
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an
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increase in the beginning, from over 40
books
increased
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to 100
books
in 2011. But a downturn came after the peak, the
books
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number of books
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boy read in 2012 declined and sharply decreased to 80
books
in 2012. Different from the
boys
, the
number
of
books
girls
read had a continuous increase from 2009 to 2012. With approximately 20
books
in 2009, the
number
of
books
the
girls
read was multiplied by 7, which had 140
books
in 2012.
In addition
, the
number
of
books
the
girls
read was one-third more than the
boys
in 2012.
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