The maps below show the village of Stockeford in 1930 and 2010.

The maps illustrate the comparison of one of the villages in Stockefored and its surroundings in 1930 and 2010.

Overall

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, it can be seen that the number of houses increased

as a result

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of many nature reserves and gardens being replaced with modern buildings and facilities for living.

To begin

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with, numerous farmlands that were first located in the east and south of Stokeford in 1930 were replaced with retirement homes in 2010 in several areas of the village.

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, the primary school near the garden in 1930 still remained in the same area.

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, to the south of the elementary school, the garden area has been transformed into homes for people who have already retired.

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, the two shops near the post office have vanished,

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the post office has remained the same. The total of houses in 2010 has

raised

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risen

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compared to 1930

due to

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the reduced green space.

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Apr 10, 2024

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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3 paragraphs

152 words

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