The maps below show the village of Stockeford in 1930 and 2010.

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The maps illustrate the comparison of one of the villages in Stockefored and its surroundings in 1930 and 2010.

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, it can be seen that the number of houses increased

as a result

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of many nature reserves and gardens being replaced with modern buildings and facilities for living.

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with, numerous farmlands that were first located in the east and south of Stokeford in 1930 were replaced with retirement homes in 2010 in several areas of the village.

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, the primary school near the garden in 1930 still remained in the same area.

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, to the south of the elementary school, the garden area has been transformed into homes for people who have already retired.

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, the two shops near the post office have vanished,

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the post office has remained the same. The total of houses in 2010 has

raised

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risen

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compared to 1930

due to

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the reduced green space.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

152 words

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The maps below show the village of Stockeford in 1930 and 2010.

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

In some countries, older people are choosing to live in retirement communities with other older people rather than living with their adult children. Is it a positive or negative development?

some argue that stories about famous people in the news is a waste of time and ridiculous. to what extent you agree?

Traditional ideas from older people about the way to live and behave are not helpful to young people and their futures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?