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A museum near your home is looking for people to do unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntery work at the museum. write a letter to the museum director to apply for the volunteer work in your letter explain why ou want to do voluntary work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir, I hope you are well and
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 am writing
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 letter to take part in social work. My name is Harjeet Kaur and living near the museum.
Beside
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, you are doing really good work
beacuse childern
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because children
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 in it. As it
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, helping others is a gesture of kindness. I am keen
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 doing work for
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an exhibition
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exhibition
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 because when
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 was
child
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a child
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 that
time
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 spent most of
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my time
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 here so now
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 have
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 after
coming
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 my university.
Also
,
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 have some experience
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 with people
due to
 taking part in
academic
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 program. The most important thing is that
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 want to do
this
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free of cost because my parents always help me and encourage me to
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helping
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 others. To
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 about timing, mostly
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 have
time
 after 3pm and on the weekends.
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,
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 could be started from tomorrow. I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience. yours faithfully Harjeet
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Grammar & Spelling
Make sure to proofread for small spelling and grammatical errors to enhance clarity, such as 'childern' should be 'children', and 'hepling' should be 'helping'.
Sentence Variety
Try to vary your sentence structure and vocabulary to make your letter more engaging. For example, instead of repeating 'I have time', you could say 'My schedule allows me...'.
Task Achievement
Remember to clearly state your reason for writing in the first paragraph to immediately address the purpose of your letter.
Task Achievement
Your letter clearly expresses your desire to volunteer and your availability.
Personal Connection
The personal touch about spending time at the museum as a child adds a nice emotional element to your letter.
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