People in some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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, it would be better for households to
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a
house
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rather than
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rent
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it in many nations.
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, that would be really
necsessary
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necessary
in the
mind
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of Asian people. In my
oppinion
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opinion
, I believe that
this
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trend has both benefits and drawbacks. On the one hand, there are many reasons why most people,
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Asian
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Asians
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want to own houses. The first reason
are
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they don’t want to depend on the
landlore
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landlady
, who can
give
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decision
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to
allowed
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them to live there or not.
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, My uncle already rented the
house
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for more than 3 years and he
was
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really enjoyed it, but because the place itself
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big
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a big
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value for sale
that
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at that
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time, the
owner’s
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just put him out and sold it.
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, in Asia, houses
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a big investment in life and
it
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they
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can bring a lot of benefits for the owners. A
house
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can used for renting
either
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apply
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living or just used for their business, not
mention
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to mention
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it
price
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the price
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can rise every
years
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.
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, some consequences of
this
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trend can
effect
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affect
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to
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apply
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households.
Firstly
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, Owning a
house
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need
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requires
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a lot of money, that really hard for normal people can
affordable
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for
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it if they
not
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bank loan. It
make
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them
working
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work
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really hard for 20 to 30 years to
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one and they will not have time for some things else.
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Secondly
, it will make them stick to only areas, which can
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they
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their
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potential. In conclusion,
this
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trend has both
benifical
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beneficial
and detrimental effects.
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