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he given chart illustrates the level of serious violent crime namely rape, robbery, aggravated assault and homicide between 1978 and 2000.

he given chart illustrates the level of serious violent crime namely rape, robbery, aggravated assault and homicide between 1978 and 2000.
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The given line graph illustrates all kinds of
crimes
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that occured
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occured
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occurred
occur
on
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in
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 and before
20th
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the 20th
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 century.
This
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 is streamlined into four
category
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categories
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, the first is the total crime
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occured
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occurred
. The second one is reports received by the police,
third
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the third
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 one is the
crimes
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 recorded by the cops and the
last
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 is the arrest for violent
crimes
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. Over the years the number of
crimes
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that occured
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occured
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occurred
had
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a
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apply
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rose
up
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apply
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drastically in 1988 and had a fall back in 2000. But over the course of two
decades
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 the
crimes
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that occured
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occured
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occurred
 had
a
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apply
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fluctuation. The
victims
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victim's
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 reports
has
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have
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 the same amount of ration in all the years. The
heighest
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highest
 record was
upto
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up to
 2.5 in 1984. Many records
was
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were
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 filed during 1995 the percentile is 2. The arrests for these brutal attacks
was
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were
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 less than 0.5 in 1978 but over the years the ratio
was
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apply
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gradually increased to 1 and maintained
in
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at
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 the same level till 2000.

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