he given chart illustrates the level of serious violent crime namely rape, robbery, aggravated assault and homicide between 1978 and 2000.

#level #crime #rape #robbery #assault #homicide

The given line graph illustrates all kinds of

crimes

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that occured

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occured

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occurred

occur

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and before

20th

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the 20th

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century.

This

is streamlined into four

categories

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, the first is the total crime

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that occured

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occured

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occurred

. The second one is reports received by the police,

third

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the third

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one is the

crimes

recorded by the cops and the

last

is the arrest for violent

crimes

. Over the years the number of

crimes

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that occured

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occured

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occurred

had

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apply

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apply

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rose

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apply

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drastically in 1988 and had a fall back in 2000. But over the course of two

decades

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decades,

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the

crimes

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that occured

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occured

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occurred

had

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apply

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fluctuation. The

victims

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victim's

victims'

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reports

has

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have

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the same amount of ration in all the years. The

heighest

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highest

record was

upto

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up to

2.5 in 1984. Many records

was

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were

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filed during 1995 the percentile is 2. The arrests for these brutal attacks

was

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were

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less than 0.5 in 1978 but over the years the ratio

was

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apply

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gradually increased to 1 and maintained

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the same level till 2000.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
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3 paragraphs

152 words

6.50

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Clear and correct grammar

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