Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, celebrities tend to earn more money than lawmakers. It raises a query on the Internet: 'Why
this
happens
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?'. In
this
essay, I will try to find an answer to
this
question.
To begin
with,
huge
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salaries of famous
people
always
disturbed
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members of society. Some
thinks
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, that
a
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life of
celebrity
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a celebrity
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It
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is only red carpets and fancy events. Unfortunately, no one seems to notice, that jobs
such
as acting, singing or writing take a lot of effort and time. That being said,
income
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the income
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which they get means, that
entertainment
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the entertainment
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industry is developing and new career opportunities are open for young
people
.
For instance
, in the period of
COVID
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COVID-19
, an enormous number of influencers
was
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born. Kids and teenagers started to download TikTok or Instagram, just to have fun.
Moreover
, a lot of them became the celebrities we know now
,
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because they decided to turn their activity into work. Another reason is that
,
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their taxes help
economy
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and can reduce poverty.
Also
, stars inspire some
people
to become like them and gain
bigger
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more
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money.
For example
, Emma Chamberlain is an
american
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American
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social media personality, model and
business woman
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businesswoman
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began her career as a Youtuber, when she was only 16, by uploading videos about her usual life on the earlier mentioned platform. Now, she owns a coffee shop and a podcast, which is my personal favourite one, Emma
also
interviewed
people
on a few Met Gala's and her estimated net worth is 3 million dollars. For me, she is a person you should look up to. In
the
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conclusion, if celebrities are getting a higher wage, than politicians, it is
such
a delight.
Due to it
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creates
a
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completely new opportunities and at the same time
inspire
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inspires
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folks to be better.
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Language and Style
Try to maintain consistency in your writing style, avoiding sudden shifts in formality.
Grammar
Ensure correct use of articles ('a', 'an', 'the'), as missing or incorrect use can slightly impact readability.
Organisation
Work on your argument structuring to make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea supported by relevant details.
Mechanics
Be cautious with spelling and punctuation, as small mistakes can distract the reader. Re-read your sentences to catch these errors.
Structure
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your essay.
Supporting Examples
You effectively used examples to support your main points, particularly with the reference to Emma Chamberlain, which made your argument more tangible.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay was well-organized, making it easy to follow your arguments.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorsements
  • revenue streams
  • global presence
  • diversified branding
  • income sources
  • free-market principles
  • market value
  • government budgets
  • public funds
  • public perception
  • value generation
  • bureaucratic
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
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