Children in rural areas are being left behind in their academic development. why is this the case . What solution can you suggest

Education
is the fundamental right of every
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.
Academic
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development of rural students
are
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far behind
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urban
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areas . In
this
essay , I would like to discuss the causes and measures for advancement . One of the biggest problems in rural areas
do
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not
have
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basic
school
infrastructure for teaching. Only
few
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faculties for numerous
childrens
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children
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. With no proper internet facilities which makes teachers to teach students .
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,
parents
are not well educated
as a result
they do not know
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the value
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of
education
.
For instance
,
a
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well educated
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parents
know how to make their kids prepare for
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the examination
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examination
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examinations
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and teach new skills for
betterment
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in
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their
life
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. On the other side ,
government
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the government
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should take measures for the development of
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children's
children
childrens
academics. They should introduce new policies for teaching by adding new infrastructure like internet connection ,
modernising
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and modernising
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the
class rooms
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classrooms
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.
Moreover
, bring the awareness and importance of
education
to their
parents
.
Due to
poverty in rural areas ,
parents
are not able to provide three meals a day
as a result
they are
force
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to do labour work in of going to
school
.
For example
,
government
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the government
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should provide free breakfast and lunch in the
school
. It will reduce
financial
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burden on their
parents
as a result
the
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they
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will send their kids to
school
.
To sum up
,
education
progress can be seen in
remote
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the remote
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area
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areas
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through only by
government
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new policies , good infrastructure and facilities like free meals and other basic
need
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to
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for
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the
childrens
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children
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. All
this
change will have
drastical
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drastic
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improvements in rural
education
.
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