Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some argue that the
goverments
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government
governments
should be focusing on looking for life and habitations on other
planest
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,
while
other
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countered
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that
that is
a waste of
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money when it could be funded to solve
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problem
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problems
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we already have on
Earth
. The idea of finding another habitable
planet
to move to from
Earth
is not a new one, it is an
inetereting
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interesting
and
fastinating
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fascinating
subject.
Scienctist
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Scientists
each
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find more and more
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for
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another
planet
or planets that are like ours. Discoveries of planets millions of
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away from us having breathable
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habits
habitats
such
as us can be a pushing the
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narrative
of travelling to another
planet
to cultivate and live when
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comes for our
Earth
to die out, either by our own doing or another ice age,
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even though
it is interesting, it is far fetch from reality, from not only our technologies but
also
our
knowleges
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knowledge
knowledges
of the galaxy. The idea of our
planet
being ruined not caused by any natural forces but by
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own selfishness is a rather sad one, in recent years our
planet
slowly
undergoes
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many
abused
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by our
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hand
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. The
pollutions
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by
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different
causes from our growing societies is eating away at our
Earth
, as mankind slowly
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itself from pure ignorance or intended
mallices
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malice
.
For example
in certain
counties
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in Africa,
law
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laws
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banning the use of plastic bags
has
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been
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but it
also
depends on the
goverments
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governments
government
of
that
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country
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countries
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to take the ban
serious
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. Some
country
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countries
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banning saw reasonable effectiveness
while
other
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saw an
incressed
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increase
in usage
due to
the negligence of the
goverments
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governments
government
. In my opinion,
the
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explorations through the galaxy
is
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needed but should not be the
prioties
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priorities
priority
when our
planet
is currently unable to solve problems of our own.
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Structure
Your essay presents a balanced view on the topic, but it would benefit from a clearer introduction and conclusion that succinctly state the topic and summarize your main points and personal stance.
Accuracy
Make sure to proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and spelling mistakes. Errors can detract from the overall clarity and professionalism of your writing.
Language Use
Consider using more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to express your ideas more vividly and engagingly. This will make your essay more compelling to read.
Content
While you provided some examples, including more specific and relevant examples would strengthen your arguments and make them more convincing.
Content Understanding
You show an understanding of the debate around government spending on space exploration versus addressing Earth's issues, which is a good foundation for the essay.
Discussion Balance
Your essay attempts to explore both sides of the argument, which is crucial for a balanced discussion. However, emphasizing your own opinion more distinctly would enhance the essay's impact.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented opportunities
  • extraterrestrial
  • satisfy human curiosity
  • practical benefits
  • inspiring goal
  • testament to human ambition
  • pursuit of knowledge
  • critics argue
  • imprudent
  • plague Earth
  • immediate attention
  • allocated for
  • environmental conservation
  • well-being
  • quality of life
  • balanced approach
  • advancements
  • benefits for humanity
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