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Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#education #university #government #students
It is a debatable topic whether the
government
 should cover all the educational
cots
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costs
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 for citizens until they complete their
university
 degrees. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 statement
some
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to some
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 extent, but
also
 disagree because
this
gives
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allows
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 society to improve their educational levels, but
also
this
 decreases the number of
students
 who
eager
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are eager
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 to complete their studies.
This
 essay will explain the reasons behind these opinions and provide examples.
To begin
 with, I believe that
education
 has to be given to all citizens
eqaully
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equally
, and if the financial factor is the reason that they can not receive
this
 right, the
government
 should support
this
.
education
 is necessary for people to gain skills and knowledge to earn money and pay living costs.
For example
, some studies showed that more than 70% of
students
 in Japan who have a
university
 degree have a decent job and earn
minimum
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a minimum
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 of 5,000,000 yen.
Education
is
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apply
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also
help
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helps
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to
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them to
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 pursue their dream
to become
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of becoming
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certain
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a certain
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 profession and the
government
 should give support and encourage people to study.
However
, giving free
education
 has some disadvantages
such
 as
reduction
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a reduction
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of
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in
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 schools' quality and
students
 do not find the worth of going to school,
collage
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college
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 or
university
.
Firstly
, the governments should spend a lot of money to provide free
education
, which limits the expense
for
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of
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 the materials and facilities resulting in a
low quality
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low-quality
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education
systems
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system
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. Another reason is that if
students
 can go to school for free, they can easily drop out because by doing
this
, they do not waste any money.
For instance
, 50% of the
students
 from my course withdrew by their 2nd year of
university
. They
were
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apply
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received
the
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apply
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government
fund
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funds
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.
However
, we international
students
 who paid more than double
of
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that of
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 local
students
remined
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remained
 until our final year.
therefore
, receiving free
education
 often loses
their
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its
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worthness
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worthiness
worthless
. In conclusion, providing free
education
 has some advantages
disadvantages
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and disadvantages
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such
 as
loses
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loss
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its
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of its
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 quality,
while
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the advantages
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advantages
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advantage
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are
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is
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provide
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providing
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eqaul
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equal
right
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rights
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 to all people.
This
 essay agrees with
this
 statement
some
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to some
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 extent but
also
disagree
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disagrees
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.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic background
  • equitable society
  • government-funded
  • higher quality standards
  • financial limitations
  • inefficiencies
  • wasteful spending
  • cost-effective
  • innovate
  • undervaluing
  • dropout rates
  • financial burden
  • well-being
  • higher education uptake
  • increased taxes
  • reallocation
  • vital sectors
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