Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is a debatable topic whether the
government
should cover all the educational cots
for citizens until they complete their Correct your spelling
costs
university
degrees. In my opinion, I agree with this
statement some
extent, but Change preposition
to some
also
disagree because this
gives
society to improve their educational levels, but Verb problem
allows
also
this
decreases the number of students
who eager
to complete their studies. Add a missing verb
are eager
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essay will explain the reasons behind these opinions and provide examples.
To begin
with, I believe that education
has to be given to all citizens eqaully
, and if the financial factor is the reason that they can not receive Correct your spelling
equally
this
right, the government
should support this
. education
is necessary for people to gain skills and knowledge to earn money and pay living costs. For example
, some studies showed that more than 70% of students
in Japan who have a university
degree have a decent job and earn minimum
of 5,000,000 yen. Add an article
a minimum
Education
is
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apply
also
help
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helps
to
pursue their dream Correct pronoun usage
them to
to become
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of becoming
certain
profession and the Add an article
a certain
government
should give support and encourage people to study.
However
, giving free education
has some disadvantages such
as reduction
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a reduction
of
schools' quality and Change preposition
in
students
do not find the worth of going to school, collage
or Correct your spelling
college
university
. Firstly
, the governments should spend a lot of money to provide free education
, which limits the expense for
the materials and facilities resulting in a Change preposition
of
low quality
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low-quality
education
systems
. Another reason is that if Fix the agreement mistake
system
students
can go to school for free, they can easily drop out because by doing this
, they do not waste any money. For instance
, 50% of the students
from my course withdrew by their 2nd year of university
. They were
received Unnecessary verb
apply
the
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apply
government
fund
. Fix the agreement mistake
funds
However
, we international students
who paid more than double of
local Correct pronoun usage
that of
students
remined
until our final year. Correct your spelling
remained
therefore
, receiving free education
often loses their
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its
worthness
.
In conclusion, providing free Correct your spelling
worthiness
worthless
education
has some advantages disadvantages
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and disadvantages
such
as loses
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loss
its
quality, Change preposition
of its
while
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the advantages
advantages
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advantage
are
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is
provide
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providing
eqaul
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equal
right
to all people. Fix the agreement mistake
rights
This
essay agrees with this
statement some
extent but Change preposition
to some
also
disagree
.Correct subject-verb agreement
disagrees
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