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The line graph below shows the number of cell phone subscribers in a particular city, by gender

The line graph below shows the number of cell phone subscribers in a particular city, by gender
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The line graph below gives information about the figure for mobile phone
users
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 in a certain city, by men and women.
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, it is noticeable that there were upward trends in the number of cell phone subscribers in both genders over the given time frame. The number of male cell phone subscribers increased rapidly from 500
users
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 in 1995 to 2750
users
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 in 2015 and female subscribers rose significantly from 600
users
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 in 1995 to 2250
users
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 in 2015.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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