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Band 5.5

Last month you had an overseas holiday with some friends were you stayed at their house. They have just send you some holiday photos. Write a letter to your friends, in your letter: Thank them for the holday and the photos Explain why didn't write earlier Invite them to come and stay with you

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Dear Jane, I'm so happy to hear from you again. I missed you so
both
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much and I can't wait to be back! I would
like
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 thank you big time and Jake
in
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for
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accomodating
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accommodating
 me in your
cozy
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cosy
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 apartment and for letting me experience the best activities in your country.
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 to that, the photos that you've sent me are all amazing! That will definitely serve as
remembrance
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 and a treasure for keeps! I wanted to apologize for not writing the
soonest
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 as I got busy at work right after my vacation.
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, I cannot find time to write an appreciation letter but was planning to make it
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 weekend,
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, since you have more time than me, I received a letter from you first. Just kidding! I'm excited to announce
you
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 both that I'll be moving
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 a bigger apartment next month and I would love to invite you to stay with me
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 the coming holidays if both of you are free. I can't wait to see you again! Take care, Andy

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Structure
Continue to use a clear structure in your writing to enhance readability. Organize your thoughts coherently, with each paragraph focusing on a single main idea.
Content
To improve your task achievement score, try to fully address all parts of the prompt in a balanced manner, ensuring that no part is overlooked.
Tone
Your letter has a personal and warmly appreciative tone, which is very suitable for the context of writing to friends. This enhances the engagement of your letter.
Organization
The clear organization of your ideas into paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose (thanking for the holiday and photos, explaining the delay in writing, and extending an invitation), contributes positively to the coherence and cohesion of your letter.
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