The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts provide information about
energy
uses of an Correct article usage
the energy
Avarage
Australian household and greenhouse Correct your spelling
average
gas
emissions which result from energy
uses.
Overall
, from the given charts, most
Correct article usage
the most
energy used
appliance in Australian Add a hyphen
energy-used
household
was heating Fix the agreement mistake
households
with
42%, but, from the second Change preposition
at
chart
, water
heating resulted
most Add the preposition
resulted in
resulted from
gas
emissions with 32% which used 30% of energy
use.
Firstly
, from the first chart
, heating was the most energy
used unit with 42%, after heating, water
heating which was 30% and other appliances with 15% comes in. While
heating, water
heating and other appliances used
more than 10% of Australian household Wrong verb form
use
energy
, refrigeration 7%, lightning 4% and cooling 2% these units are all below 10% uses of energy
.
Secondly
, from the second chart
, water
heating resulted
most of the Add the preposition
resulted in
resulted from
green house
Correct your spelling
greenhouse
gas
emissions which was
32%, Change the verb form
were
substantly
other appliances and refrigeration ranked in with 28% and 14%. Just like the rankings of the first Correct your spelling
substantially
chart
, but only heating changes into refrigeration. After 3 most gas
emmited
units, heating with 15%, lightning with 8% and cooling with 3%.Correct your spelling
emitted
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