Some people like to spend their leisure time after work with co-workers while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Some folks enjoy
to spend
their free Change the verb form
spending
time
with co-workers
, Correct word choice
while other
other group
of Change the wording
another group
other groups
people
chose
to keep theirWrong verb form
choose
pravite activites
and Correct your spelling
private activities
work
life
separeted
.
On the one hand, spending Correct your spelling
separated
separate
after
Add a hyphen
after-work
work
time
with the job
's place collegues
Correct your spelling
colleagues
,
could build better Remove the comma
apply
relationships
, which will make working together more enjoyable. In the
every Correct article usage
apply
carrier
path person Correct your spelling
career
need
to co-Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
work
with other people
, having good relationships
with the job
folks make
communication quality at Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
the
higher level, Correct article usage
a
moreover
improve
teamwork. During Correct subject-verb agreement
improves
the
working hours is hard to get to know Correct article usage
apply
co-workers
, due
to that the only way to build friendships is to spend leisure Correct word choice
and due
time
together. The best example that shown
the truth of Wrong verb form
shows
this
thesis is workships
that take a place in Correct your spelling
workshops
majority
of companies. Menagers are organising Add an article
the majority
a majority
this
kind of team metting
after working hoursCorrect your spelling
meeting
,
because it Remove the comma
apply
improve
working quality by making Change the verb form
improves
employes
Correct your spelling
employees
more close
to each other. Spending leisure Replace the words
closer
time
with job
collegues
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colleagues
are
profitable Correct subject-verb agreement
is
to
Change preposition
for
people
working together and company
itself.
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the company
On the other hand
, keep
Wrong verb form
keeping
work-
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a work-life
life
balance is important to feel well, although
spending free time
with co-workers
, resamble about work
, which make
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makes
keep
the balance quite harder. Wrong verb form
keeping
People
to build relationships
need something in common to talk about it, with friends from workplace
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the workplace
this
topic is the same job
. Spending eight or more hours at work
and then
talk
with Wrong verb form
talking
people
about work
making
thinking about Wrong verb form
makes
others
things quite Correct quantifier usage
other
imposible
, Correct your spelling
impossible
in addition
job
in the centre of Correct article usage
a job
pearson
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Pearson
life
can cause a
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apply
burn out
. Taking medical workers Join the words
burnout
for example
, their work
is emocionally
heavy, spend after Correct your spelling
emotionally
work
times
with Fix the agreement mistake
time
others
doctors and talking about patients, Correct quantifier usage
other
cause
the Wrong verb form
causing
patients
problems the main thing in doctors Change to a genitive case
patient's
patients'
life
. Being overwhelmed about
workplace stories and personal stories of patients, Change preposition
by
make
the quality of treating Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
people
diseases poorer and Change noun form
people's
lead
to Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
lack
of self-esteem.
Correct article usage
a lack
to conclude
, I see both bright and dark sides of spending leisure time
with co-workers
, sometimes it is make
working easier Wrong verb form
makes
by
good Change preposition
through
relationships
, sometimes it is making
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makes
employess
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employees
overwhelmd
by their jobs. In my Correct your spelling
overwhelmed
opnion
it Correct your spelling
opinion
better
to care about Add a missing verb
is better
work
Add a hyphen
work-life
life
balance then
spend free Correct your spelling
than
time
with people
from workplace
.Add an article
the workplace
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