You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. More and more people are buying food that is ready to eat rather than choosing to eat home-cooked food. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

With the rapid growth of technology, the world has come a long way . Over the
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decades, the Lifestyle of people has changed a lot
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the midst of change , communities are more interested
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ready
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ready-to-eat
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to eat
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food
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as fast food than healthy
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foods . There is a range of conflicting arguments related to the assertion .
This
seems pretty controversial across the globe. A colossal number of folks believe eating fast food or
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foods
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bad for our health . In the succeeding monograph, I intend to delve into the rationale for both sides
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Develop your ideas more comprehensively by including specific examples and reasons for each point made. This will help to support your arguments and make your essay more persuasive.
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Utilize linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs. This will aid in the flow of your essay, making it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
Topic Relevance
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Idea Generation
You have a good starting point for discussing the advantages and disadvantages of ready-to-eat food versus home-cooked meals.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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