Some people think that parents should teach their children about the importance of recycling. Others believe recycling should be taught in schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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We the rapid growth of technology, the world has come a long way. We live in a society and it's our responsibility to take care of them But
unfortunately
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the amount of litter has been increasing day by day
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recycling has become a crucial part of our life . The amount of litter is escalating at an alarming rate . That's the reason why some authorities claim that parents should teach their children about recycling
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a colossal number of folks Accord that recycling should be taught in education platforms . In the succeeding monograph, I intend to delve into the rationale for both sides
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proffer examples to justify my assertion.
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Introduction
Ensure your introduction clearly presents the topic and previews the discussion points without errors. The current introduction could be streamlined for clarity.
Structure
Work on structuring your essay with clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea, supporting it with specific examples or reasons.
Argument Development
Develop your argument for both views more fully. Providing specific examples and explaining how they support your opinion will make your essay more persuasive.
Grammar
Watch out for grammatical errors and typos. Improving your accuracy in language use will help your score.
Conclusion
Conclude your essay by summarizing the main points and clearly stating your opinion. This helps the reader understand your final stance.
Topic Understanding
You have chosen an engaging topic and clearly understand the importance of recycling.
Balanced Argument
You've made an effort to discuss both sides of the argument, which is essential for this type of essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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