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The chart graph shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different types of attractions from 1980 to 2010

The chart graph shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different types of attractions from 1980 to 2010
The chart illustrates the amount of Scottish
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tourist
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, who visited four attractions by
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, in
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time
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the time
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period
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 between 1980 and 2010.
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, it can be
clarly
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clearly
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taht
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that
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time
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period
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 the most popular place to visit was the
Castle
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 and the least popular place was
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 zoo. In
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1985 the aquarium was
most
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 visited attraction, even
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frequent
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attened
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attended
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 than
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castle
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a castle
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, but
it
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 popularity dropped down
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 years. The Festival was attended more often than the zoo, but
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 than the
Castle
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. To get more details, the
percentage
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 visiting
Festival
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the Festival
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was remaining
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 quite stable for
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 given
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period
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, reaching
te
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the
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 high of 30
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percent
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 in
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1980 and hitting
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 low of 25
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percent
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 in
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2010. The amount of people sightseeing
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Zoo was
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fluctuating
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 from 9 to 20
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 for
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 given
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period
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, reaching
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 low of 9
int
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in
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 the
1990
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ant
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and
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 peak of 20 in
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2010. The
percentage
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 visiting the
Castle
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 and the Aquarium
was remaining
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 unstable. the
percentage
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 of
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Castle
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 visitors reached the lowest point of 25
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percent
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 in
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1980,
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rising to
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40
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percent
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 in
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1995 and next was dropping to reach 31
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percent
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per cent
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 in
the
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2010.
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 who
attented
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attended
 the Aquarium was 20
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percent
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per cent
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 in
the
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1980,
then
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 reached
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 peak of 35
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 in
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1985 and was dropping to
to
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fell to 9
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 in
the
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2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourist, percentage, time, period, castle, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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