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Some people believe that one-on-one lessons are better for learning while others think that group lessons are superior. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #lessons #group
A
group
 of individuals argues that personal
classes
 are advantageous as compared to
group
classes
. Both ways of education have
its
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 own merits and demerits. I personally prefer to take individual
classes
 to have my doubts
cleared
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whereas
group
 studies will involve numerous students and
teacher
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the teacher
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 might be unable to address my weaknesses properly.
To begin
 with,
a
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apply
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one-on-one tutoring has become
popular
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a popular
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 choice among pupils of various subjects. The reason behind
this
 progress is
development
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the development
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in
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of
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 apps related to a myriad of fields
such
 as apps that particularly focus on one subject. The professors are from various backgrounds and capability to clear any doubts in the mind of a curious student.
Although
,
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apply
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the
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apply
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schools are places where pupils learn
majority
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the majority
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 of
curriculum
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the curriculum
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, the
tutions
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tuitions
 play a dramatic role in the growth of the pupil's horizon.
For example
, the app namely preply provides
tutions
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tutors
 with expert professors in their fields like maths and science. These are live
classes
 where a teacher can assess student's capabilities and problems in any particular field.
Therefore
, the feedback contributes immensely towards academic success.
On the contrary
,
the
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apply
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group
 tutoring
also
 has some benefits
cannot
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 be rejected. Studying together in a
group
 can help students to prepare their projects together and even
practising
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practise
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 in a team to help each other. To exemplify, the language students practice dialogues with each other and work together to create plays of
shakespeare
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.
To conclude
, it is crucial to have all the pros and cons before deciding which course will be beneficial for an individual. If personal
tution
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tuition
tutor
 helps a student to clear his problems but
group
classes
assists
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 in working in teams to help each other grow. In my perspective, clearing
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individuals'
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individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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 doubts
are
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is
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 really important ,so it is important to clear
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them
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it
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them
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 at foundation levels.
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Grammar & Vocabulary
Ensure precision in vocabulary and grammar to refine clarity and effectiveness.
Task Response
Avoid overgeneralization and strive for more nuanced arguments with a wider range of examples.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider using more linking phrases to better connect ideas within and between paragraphs, enhancing the essay's flow.
Task Response
Your essay provides a balanced view, discussing both perspectives and adding your opinion, which is great for task response.
Task Achievement
The use of specific examples, such as mentioning the app Preply, effectively supports your argument, enhancing the task achievement score.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion, effectively aids in the understanding of your essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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