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Some poeple say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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The debate about
students
 spending a lot of their time learning about facts more than actually learning and practising new
skills
 is becoming more popular recently,
i
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 do actually agree with
this
 and I will both views in
this
 article. On the one hand, if we see
this
 problem in a matter of time, it is hard for all the educational properties to try to force the
students
 to gain and practising new
skills
, since as we know a high fraction of
students
 do not even do good in learning only facts and theoretical education.
in addition
, making young people spend much more time on practical
skills
 will result in a generation of non-educated
students
 and the reason for
this
 is that they did not achieve the required level of education since they spend effort more than ever on learning practical
skills
,
while
 as we know the only purpose for the educational communities is to offer the essential knowledge for their
students
.
On the other hand
, an opportunity for our generation to learn and explore new
skills
 will be spectacular.
Furthermore
, it will give the young
students
 a real-life experience.
Moreover
, developing the student's
skills
 will be beneficial for professional companies,
as a result
, the demand will be high and the job opportunities will increase of course,
whereas
 in the end, the economy will improve worldwide.
To conclude
, theoretical education is very important for sure, but from my point of view, the advantages of gaining and practising new
skills
 outnumber the disadvantages.
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