The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeen 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeen 2011 and 2018. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph indicates the
number
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of
stores
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that closed and opened new
stores
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in one country from 2011 to 2018. Looking at the
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that the opening
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stores
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dramatically decreased compared with in the years 2011 and 2018.
However
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, despite of sharp decrease for the year
in
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2015, the closures
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stores
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of stores
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a little bit declined. A cursory glance at the data reveals that
the
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8,500
of
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stores
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opened in 2011
while
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, it
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considerably dropped in 2011 to about 4,000. Between 2012 and 2014, the
number
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of new shops gradually rose by 4,000 to approximately 6,100.
After
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this
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period, the
number
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of shops decreased significantly by over 5,000.
Also
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, between 2015 and 2018 show little changes. Another eye-catching trend is that the
number
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of closures
stores
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started at over 6,000 in 2011, slightly fell
at
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6,000 in 2012, rose by 1,000 in 2013, dropped to about 6,500 in the year 2014, and
further
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declined to 5,00 for the year 2015.
However
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, it soared sharply in 2016 at nearly 5,000 and maintained a similar level from 2016 and 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend analysis
  • Fluctuation
  • Shop closures
  • Retail openings
  • Economic conditions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Local economy
  • Business dynamics
  • Commercial landscape
  • Statistical comparison
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Consumer trends
  • Market forces
  • Business cycle
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