The pie charts below give information about the population of South Korea in 2000 and 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below give information about the population of South Korea in 2000 and 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given two pie charts illustrate the analysis of the population in South Korea by
ages
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in the given period: 2000 and 2050.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that people
with
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between
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ages
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the ages
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between
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of
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40 and 59 took up the largest proportion of the charts both in 2000 and in 2050. In detail, the percentage of children who is the age of under 19 was 15% in 2000, but
in contrast
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, that of children is anticipated to decrease from 15% to 7% in 2050. The younger generation, who are between 20 and 39
years
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old, was 33%, which is
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expected to
a
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slight decrease in 2050 of 4%. There was a projection that both
generation
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generations
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of
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from 40 to 59
years
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old and over 60
years
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old will increase over a 50-year period. Turning to the figure for the figure for 2050, people
with
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above 40
years
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old
is
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are
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expected to take up
among
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the whole generation in 2050 (64%).
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, the percentage of the young under 19
years
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old is expected to consist of just 7%, which is the
least
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lowest
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proportion in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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