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You are living in a University residence, and you have a problem with the high levels of noise from a new campus restaurant which is open late at night. Write a letter to the governor of the University. In your letter: -Complain about the situation -Say why this is a problem -And propose ways to reduce the noise.

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Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why I am addressing you is that high levels of
noise
 in the
restaurant
 in front of
University
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the University
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.
This
restaurant
called
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is called
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 "RICH". When it is midnight high levels of
noise
 will be heard from
restaurant
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the restaurant
a restaurant
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,
therefore
,I
am not do
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am not doing
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 my homework
in
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at
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 midnight. I have been living and studying at Diplomatik
University
 in
Toshkent
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Tashkent
. I am
sophomore
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a sophomore
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this
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at this
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University
. I study day and
night
for
this
 reason. I typically
doing
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do
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 homework
night
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at night
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however
 high levels of
noise
 in the
restaurant
 to interrupted
with
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apply
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my studies.
Restaurant
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Restaurants
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is
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are
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 mostly open at
night
 on account of
being
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having
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 many customers.
As a
result
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result,
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 a loud
noise
 is heard from the
restaurant
 which prevents
University
 students from studying. I suggest
established
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establishing
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 strict operational hours for the
restaurant
recommendiy
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recommending
recommended
am
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an
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 earlier closure time to ensure the
noise
 does not affect the residents late at
night
 . We asked the owner of the
restaurant
 to install double-glazed windows in the
restaurant
. If We ask
is
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that is
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 done everything, the students will study and live comfortably. We look forward to your quick resolution of
this
 issue.
Your
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Yours
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 sincerely, Emily Brown
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Grammar
There are several grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the message. Be sure to proofread and check for correct verb forms, articles, and prepositions.
Coherence
Ensure that each paragraph focuses clearly on a single idea to improve coherence.
Task Achievement
To strengthen your task achievement, provide more specific examples of how the noise affects your studies beyond just mentioning the interruption of homework.
Format
The letter format is appropriately followed with a clear greeting and closing.
Task Achievement
The proposal to establish strict operational hours and install double-glazed windows is effective and appropriate.
Tone
The tone of the letter is polite yet firm, which is suitable for addressing a formal complaint.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • residence
  • incessant
  • disrupt
  • sleep pattern
  • well-being
  • academic performance
  • soundproofing
  • noise-canceling barriers
  • double-glazed windows
  • mitigate
  • operational hours
  • closure time
  • protocol
  • monitoring
  • conducive
  • swift resolution
  • emphasis
  • impact
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