The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts illustrate information about occupation in one European country.

Overall

, the UK experienced different percentages during the period:

men

full-time showed a decreased

percentage

while

women

showed an increase;

men

part-time showed an upward

percentage

while

women

showed a decrease. In 1988, the largest

percentage

of full-time

workers

was

men

reaching 53%,

whereas

women

reached 19%, the difference between them was 34%. The largest

percentage

of part-time

workers

was

women

reached 22%,

in contrast

men

reached 6%, the difference between them was 16%. Total number during the period = 23,839. In 2012, the largest of full-time

workers

was for

men

achieved 47%, which declined by 6% compared to 1988,

while

women

achieved 26%,

rose

Correct pronoun usage

which rose

show examples

by 7%. The largest

percentage

of part-time

workers

was

women

achieved 20%, which dropped by 2% compared to 1988,

although

men

achieved 7, which grew by 1%. Total number during the period = 29,600 rose by 5761 compared to 1988.

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