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Some people claim that there are more disadvandages of car ownership than advantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

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Some
people
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 opine that owning a
car
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 has more merits than demerits.
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, I do not think so, and I will discuss both pros and cons of it in the following paragraphs. On the one hand,
people
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 show their society states by luxury
cars
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. Especially, sports
cars
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 are the
cars
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 only rich
people
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 can afford
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because their prices are usually higher than a house. In my opinion, racing
cars
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 are quite beautiful!
People
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 may pay a lot of money to get one. On top of that,
cars
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 are useful, because if you have a
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, you can go
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anywhere you want. Taking coaches is not convenient,
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 the lack of timetables, and bus stops are everywhere.
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, a
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 owner can go to a remote area alone, and he or she can stay there as long as they want.
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,
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 can sleep in their
cars
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, but
people
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 can not stay a whole night on a motorbike. These are the benefits of
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.
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,
cars
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 are not usually cheap.
According to
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 accounting theory, the time you buy a
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, you will lose 3% of its value, and you will keep losing 5% year by year.
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, you have to pay the insurance, maintenance, repair fee, and so on. It is pricy for many
people
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, but nowadays most
people
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 have
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, and if you do not have a
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, how can you live your life?
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, my friend Betty is a woman without a
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, and everyone considers she is poor. She and my other friends do not have common topics to chat with.
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,
cars
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 play an important role in our society. In a nutshell, driving
cars
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 is essential in our world, but I think
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 is not a necessity because we can use other ways to reach a place.
Cars
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 are so costly, that not everyone needs them and can buy them.
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, owning a
car
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 does have many good in your life,
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 as showing off, having a common with others, handy transportation, and so forth. In my view, without a
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,
people
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 can still be alive, and
people
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 do not have to buy a
car
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.
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, they can use that money to do other things they like.
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