Computer and A.I technology being used for online education. Can artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience. Is this a postitive or negative development?

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Nowadays, people and artificial
intelligence
are relating to each other
significant
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dependently, especially,
computers
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when computers
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or artificial
intelligence
are used for
education
in
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online. Actually,
computers
and technological artificial
intelligence
are able to increase learning
experience
and they are
also
playing an important role in enhancing human
education
in the future. First of all,
computers
and AI
technology
could help
humans
for learning
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or
gaining
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knowledge and they can give
humans
experience
from
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them
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or study. People always improve their
invention
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inventions
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about AI
technology
, so these inventions are in the new version.
Then
, AI
technology
gives them a lot of
experience
about update
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in updating
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information quickly and effectively.
For example
, students usually search
information
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for information
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and some knowledge about their lessons, homework and so on
within
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on
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the Internet.
Furthermore
, artificial
intelligence
and modern
computers
are very useful and helpful for
educational
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the educational
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system. They give knowledge and effective
experience
for
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to
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humans
who need these
advantage
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advantages
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from
technology
to make their
life
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lives
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less difficult, especially, for school in
education
. Somehow, these technological artificial
intelligence
is
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is also run
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also
ran by
humans
and do not out of control. In conclusion,
computers
and A.
I
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Technology
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technology
are
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very useful in
education
, for students and
also
for other types of
career
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careers
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relate
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to
education
. Because of never
being
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apply
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lost control
by
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of
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humans
,
technology
and AI for
education
work effectively and reliably to improve students's skills.
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You addressed the topic directly and provided a clear position on the benefits of AI and computer technology in education.
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You provided a conclusion that summarized your main points effectively, reinforcing your argument positively.

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