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Computers and AI technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development?

#computers #technology #education #intelligence #development
In recent years, high-tech devices and AI technology
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 increasingly being used for online education. Throughout many years,
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show
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 that robots
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 the studying experience very much,
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it
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 a negative development in the behaviour of people. It must be acknowledged that the use of AI in education can make high-quality learning materials more accessible to a global audience, breaking down barriers related to geographical location, economic status, or the availability of skilled teachers.
This
 is because AI provides a variety of apps for every student to study or work online with their friends.
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, it can help them to connect to
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knowledge easily.
Consequently
, it will bring back the quality of
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 and create a chance for students to get high marks.
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, all schools in my country are provided
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 computers for students to learn online
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 and approach AI technology via social platforms
such
 as Facebook and
Youtube
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. Another worth consideration is that over-reliance on technology can lead to issues of data privacy and security, with students' learning data being particularly sensitive.
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the
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internet criminals are easy to scam your information
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 money in
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 way. Take
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 as a prime example, where people use electronic components to get
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information. In conclusion, despite the improvement
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 learning experience in artificial intelligence, governments should encourage people to go outside to reduce the over-reliance on computers.

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Clarity in Position
Ensure a clear and direct response to the essay question, stating clearly if AI and online learning is a positive or negative development.
Support for Argument
Develop your main points with more specific examples or evidence to strengthen your argument.
Balanced Discussion
Address both the positive and negative aspects of the topic in a balanced way to provide a comprehensive understanding of the issue.
Positive Aspect
Introduction of AI in education expanding access to learning
Critical Consideration
Acknowledgment of privacy and security concerns with AI in education

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovative platforms
  • customized learning
  • adaptability
  • efficiency
  • lifelong learning
  • automation
  • feedback mechanisms
  • educational resources
  • remote accessibility
  • critical thinking
  • emotional development
  • over-reliance
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