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Band 5.5

not all drivers obey the laws while driving on roads, what are the reasons for this? what can be done to fix this problem?

#drivers #laws #roads
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In modern society,
although
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traffic
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laws
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 apply to arrange
myriad
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 of
road
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 safety, some
drivers
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 avoid
to obey
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obeying
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 them. I will exert considerable circumstances beyond it and propose potential solutions to address
this
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 issue. One of the primary reasons is ignorance or misunderstanding of regulations. If they have not received adequate education or training,
lack
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a lack
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 of awareness or understanding of
traffic
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laws
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 can lead
drivers
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 to violate rules.
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, individuals who are running late for appointments or work might prioritize reaching their destination quickly over obeying
traffic
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laws
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, leading to violations in the process. Another significant factor contributing to the issue is the presence of external
influence
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such
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peer
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 pressure or time constraints.
Drivers
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 might encounter
to
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peer
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 influence and engage in risky
behaviors
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behaviours
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 like speeding driving to fit in with a group of friends.
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, in the United States where there is
a
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strong personal freedom and individualism,
desire
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the desire
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 to conform to social norms within a
peer
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 group can outweigh
to obey
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obeying
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 the
laws
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. One possible solution to
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 problem is comprehensive driver education programs should be prioritized to ensure that all
drivers
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 are well-informed about
traffic
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laws
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.
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, governments should provide access to
counseling
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counselling
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 services,
peer
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 support groups,
mentoring
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and mentoring
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 programs that offer encouragement to individuals who face external influences.
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, improving
traffic
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 flow and reducing congestion through better urban planning,
road
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 design, and
traffic
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 management can help alleviate the pressure to speed and rush and prevent the disruption of
road
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laws
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.
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, the Netherlands is known for its advanced urban planning and transportation infrastructure, which
prioritize
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prioritizes
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 the safety and efficiency of all
road
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 users and mitigates the pressure to speed and rush. In conclusion, ignorance or misunderstanding of regulations, desire to reach quickly and external influences are the most ubiquitous
contributers
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contributors
 to
ignore
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ignoring
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the
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apply
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road
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laws
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.
By implementing
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Implementing
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 strategies
such
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 as training programs, advanced
road
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 design and
traffic
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 management can lessen
this
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 problem.
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Clarity of Expression
Ensure clarity and precision in your writing. For example, 'avoid to obey them' could be more accurately written as 'choose not to obey them'. This will enhance the clarity and effectiveness of your argument.
Use of Examples
Expand your examples to demonstrate broader applicability and support your arguments more robustly. While the United States and Netherlands are mentioned, more varied and specific examples could strengthen your argument.
Sentence Variety
Work on varying your sentence structures more to enhance the readability and flow of your essay. This will also demonstrate greater linguistic range and control.
Task Response
Your essay addresses the topic comprehensively, covering both reasons for the problem and potential solutions.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have structured your essay logically, with clear paragraphs that advance your argument effectively.
Structural Integrity
The introduction and conclusion effectively bookend the essay, providing a clear overview and summary of your arguments.

Your opinion

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