Many people believe that social networking sites ike Facebook have had a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree. sive reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words

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In
this
era, networking sites
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become essential in
this
modern world. Using social networking has both positive and negative aspects. I will discuss both in
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paragraphs and will give my opinion.
To begin
with, there are a plethora
positive
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of positive
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effect
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effects
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on our community. To explain,
while
using social media
such
as Facebook, Instagram and soon, people can make a lot of friends from different countries with diverse cultures.
For example
, when food bloggers post the video, many food lovers like and share their opinion and discuss
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related topics.
Moreover
,
community
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the community
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will understand each other culture and
tradition
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traditions
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which helps when they visit other countries without any problems and not
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the emotions of
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country.
Thus
,
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, there are many disadvantages of social media which
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the community.
Firstly
, making new friends
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online without meeting face to face is not
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a better
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way than in real life.
For instance
, a person cannot make
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a decision
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about
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others'
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characteristics without seeing expressions, voice of tone and it
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does not
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create trust efficiency between them.
In addition
, many viral videos against others are
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online without
permission
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the permission
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of
host
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,
which
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who
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is
commit
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the crime.
Therefore
, it is not
good
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way to use. In conclusion, it depends on
person
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the person
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how he/she
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this
. It can use their benefits which help to create new ideas and
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other’s country
culture
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cultures
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and
tradition
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traditions
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rather than using
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them
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to damage other’s
identity
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identities
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and characteristics.
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task response
You've provided a balanced view by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of social networking sites.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion of your essay are clear, framing your argument well.

Word Count

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