Many people believe that social networking sites ike Facebook have had a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree. sive reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words
In
this
era, networking sites has
become essential in Change the verb form
have
this
modern world. Using social networking has both positive and negative aspects. I will discuss both in coming
paragraphs and will give my opinion.
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the coming
To begin
with, there are a plethora positive
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of positive
effect
on our community. To explain, Fix the agreement mistake
effects
while
using social media such
as Facebook, Instagram and soon, people can make a lot of friends from different countries with diverse cultures. For example
, when food bloggers post the video, many food lovers like and share their opinion and discuss on
related topics. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, community
will understand each other culture and Add an article
the community
tradition
which helps when they visit other countries without any problems and not Fix the agreement mistake
traditions
affecting
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affect
adopted
country. Add an article
the adopted
Thus
,
On the other hand
, there are many disadvantages of social media which affected
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affect
Firstly
, making new friends on
online without meeting face to face is not Change preposition
apply
better
way than in real life. Correct article usage
a better
For instance
, a person cannot make decision
about Add an article
a decision
the decision
others
characteristics without seeing expressions, voice of tone and it Change noun form
others'
other's
not
create trust efficiency between them. Add a missing verb
does not
In addition
, many viral videos against others are showed on
online without Wrong verb form
shown
permission
of Add an article
the permission
host
, Correct article usage
the host
which
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who
commit
the crime. Wrong verb form
committing
Therefore
, it is not good
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In conclusion, it depends on Add an article
a good
person
how he/she Add an article
the person
a person
use
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uses
this
. It can use their benefits which help to create new ideas and knowing
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know
culture
and Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
tradition
rather than using Fix the agreement mistake
traditions
it
to damage other’s Correct pronoun usage
them
identity
and characteristics.Fix the agreement mistake
identities
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task response
Try to focus on developing your ideas more thoroughly with specific examples. This can help strengthen your argument and provide a clearer understanding of your viewpoints.
coherence and cohesion
For a more coherent essay, work on connecting your ideas more smoothly. Use linking words effectively to guide the reader through your argument.
grammar
Review and correct grammatical errors and typos to improve the overall clarity and professional tone of your writing.
task response
You've provided a balanced view by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of social networking sites.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion of your essay are clear, framing your argument well.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.