The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
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The chart illustrates estimated world illiteracy percentages by six variety regions and by gender for the
last
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year. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, the proportion of
females
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was the highest in South Asia,
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that of
females
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made up the lowest percentage in developed countries. In detail, there was the largest proportion of
females
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and males, accounting for 55% and 35% respectively in South Asia. The second highest percentage of women was 52%,
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that of men represented less than 30% in
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States. In Sub-Saharan Africa, the rate of males was the second largest share, at just over 30%,
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the figure for
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was responsible for approximately 48%. In East Asia, the figure for
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represented a fifth which is two times higher than the rate of males in Latin America.
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, the rate of Latin American women was almost 12% which is twice as high as that of East Asian men. There were the lowest percentages of women and men, at 2% and 1% relevantly
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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