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The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table graph compares four indicators (social and economic) in four different countries (Canada,
Japan
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,
Peru
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, and
Zaire
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) year 1994.
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, it can clearly be seen that
Japan
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 led in all four categories with the exception of daily calorie supply per person.
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,
Zaire
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 was the lowest
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 all the measurements. In terms of economics, the two lowest annual incomes were
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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 which accounted for 160 and 130, respectively.
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, Canada’s at 11100 and
Japan
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’s at 15760 yearly earnings were more than 30 times of
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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 combined. Regarding the other three indicators, which are social scales, life expectancy in
Japan
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 surpassed Canada with only a slight difference
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 2 points
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 it was 27 with
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 and 31 with
Zaire
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.
Japan
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 and Canada only had a few gaps in daily calorie supply per person (3326 vs 2846) and had the exact same number in adult literacy rate at 99%. These two categories had
Zaire
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 as the lowest number at 1749 for calorie consumption and 34% only for adults with literature.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, peru, zaire with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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