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The table below shows the results of a survey asking US consumers about shopping at K-Mart. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of a survey asking US consumers about shopping at K-Mart. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the results of
survey
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a survey
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 about the
reasons
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 why US
consumers
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 decided to shop at
K-Mart
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.
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, it is clearly seen that the largest proportion of male
consumers
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 (30%) decided to shop at
K-Mart
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due to
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 the convenience of distance,
while
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 the largest percentage of female
consumers
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 (27%) chose to go to
K-Mart
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due to
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good
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 reputation. In detail, almost half of
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consumers
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the consumers
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 both male and female answered
to
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the survey that they were satisfied with
decent
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a decent
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distant
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 and good reputation of
K-Mart
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, which is shown
48
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at 48
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% and 47%, respectively.
Subsequently
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, all
consumers
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 regardless of gender responded parking was one of the
reasons
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 why they chose to stop by
K-Mart
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, both accounted for the third largest among the answers in
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.
In contrast
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, only 2% of male
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 responded
the
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reasons
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 for 24-hour service,
none
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and none
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 of
female
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the female
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consumers
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 answered
of
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that at the same time. Turning to the average, which is combined male
consumers
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 and female
consumers
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, the quarter percentage of
consumers
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 decided to go to
K-Mart
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due to
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distant
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distance
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. Friendly staff and 24-hour service did not exert an influence on the
reasons
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 for going to
K-Mart
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, only accounted for under 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, consumers, k-mart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer preferences
  • big-box retailer
  • demographics
  • frequency of shopping
  • overall satisfaction
  • negative feedback
  • specific product availability
  • price competitiveness
  • convenience
  • survey results
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