You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The bar chart illustrates data about the percentage of families that spent their weekly income in one country between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that the type of spending in 1968 and 2018 was quite different.
The food
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in 1968 was the top spending
in
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each week
while
The
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Leisure in 2018 was the highest of expenses.
However
, The fuel and power in 1968 were as low as in 2018.
According to
1986, food was the peak of spending in families
around
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35% which was very different from other consumption.
However
,
the
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housing, Clothing and footwear were similar the number
of
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spent approximately 10%
while
the household goods, personal goods and transport, there were equal
expenditure
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expenditures
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just
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under 10%.
Moreover
, the fuel and power
was
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were
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the lowest
overall
.
In addition
, in 2018, leisure
was
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had
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a peak of just over 20% and close to housing had
the
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percentage of
spent
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18%.
While
the proportion of food and transport was nearly 15%.
However
,
remaining
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the remaining
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expenses were similar at around 10%.
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