The two maps below show substantial changes of an island befor and after equipment of some tourist facilities.
The maps portray the transformation of an
island
following the construction of tourist
facilities
.
Overall
the island
was transformed into a proper tourist
spot after the construction of tourist
infrastructures.The island
initially
lacked any accommodation
or roadsFix the agreement mistake
accommodations
Rephrase
apply
initially
.The roads connect tourist
accommodation with various places of interest for the tourists such
as the beach and restaurant.
The island
was short of tourist
homes as well as
specific swimming areas.But following its development there were several hotels and specific swimming areas to cater to the needs of the visiting tourists.
Multiple roads both for vehicles as well as
pedestrians this
would greatly increase the ease of travelling within the Correct pronoun usage
apply
island
.Also
the Add a comma
Also,
island
lacked any reception area in the beginning which has been developed as well later.
There is also
the experience of fishing as well for those who would love to fish while
sailing and get an exotic experienceSubmitted by Kuruppthu55 on
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