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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps show the main changes which have taken place in the town of Nelson between the year 2000 and today. In general, it appears that Nelson has become a much more modern
city
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, with far more shopping and transport facilities. One interesting change is that a new trans line has been built, to connect the university with the town centre. In 2000, there wasn't any accommodation for students, but a hall of residence
has been
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 built near the university. Another striking change is that the old market in the west of the
city
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 has been knocked down to make way for new shops. A completely new covered market has
also
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 been built on the other side of town. If we look at the port area, it has been pedestrianized since 2000, and a range of entertainment facilities have been built,
such
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 as restaurants, bars and clubs. The north-east of the
city
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 used to be a green area, with lots of trees, but the trees have been cut down, and a new shopping complex has been constructed. A final interesting development has been the introduction of a
bike-rental
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bike rental
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 scheme in the
city
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 centre.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • land use
  • residential
  • commercial
  • green spaces
  • public transport
  • urbanization
  • de-urbanization
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • industrial
  • transformation
  • recent times
  • comparisons
  • notable
  • key features
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