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The two maps below show substantial changes of an island befor and after equipment of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show substantial changes of an island befor and after equipment of some tourist facilities.
A glance at the maps provides revisions of an island before and after installing some tourist facilities.
Overall
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, the island is surrounded by a sea and has a
beach
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 and some trees before exploitation.
However
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, the trees did not be removed after the equipment.
According to
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 the information shown on the maps, there were two areas for accommodation and
one
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 restaurant and
one
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 reception were installed.
Besides
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, there was a vehicle track surrounding the reception with
one
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 side towards the restaurant and the other
was
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connected with the pier.
Moreover
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, both accommodation regions had foodpaths, whilst the
one
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 which was close to the
beach
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 had
one
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 particular food path towards the
beach
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.
In addition
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, there were some sailboats parked aside from the pier. What should be particularly mentioned is that the
beach
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 was scheduled to be a swimming region.
To sum up
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, it can be apparently seen that only
two third
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two-thirds
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 of the island was exploited as there was a proportion which did not set up any facilities.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words beach, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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