Some people believe that the expansion of tourism is ruining the culture of a country, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting a culture. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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debate over whether the problem of expanding

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will end up destroying the

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of a

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or preserving it. Before throwing our

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so fast, we should consider the situation rationally. Personally, in

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ever-changing world, I believe that neither of them would happen

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the expansion of

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, as long as the

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takes action in the right way. On the one hand, no

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can be preserved better without letting others know about it. The essence of

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is not only about showcasing the uniqueness of one's

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to that of the

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but

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about letting the world know there are certain special things that are worth the

tourists

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to visit and feel about them.

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, in China, there are 56 ethnic minorities living in different regions of the

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, yet if the

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don't go there and travel,

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the cultural heritage of those

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would be hidden under silence.

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, the expansion of

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would give the opportunity to the local residents a second chance of employment in those areas. By doing so, it will simply boost the economy. So, the

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should try their best to regulate the rules and better serve the

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as well as

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better

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their local

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.

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, the probability of expanding

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may end up destroying the nature of certain cultures. Generally speaking, the vast majority of the

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in a

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do have their own beliefs that they have been holding for centuries. So, it is their duty to preserve those beliefs from being forgotten and left behind.

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, in Kazakhstan,

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believe that the increasing number of

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will ruin their

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,

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, it certainly did. The increasing number of

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did affect the way those

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do things in their daily

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. They feel that making money is what success really means and many

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end up not doing what they have been preserving. So, the

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has the responsibility to do what is expected of their citizens by protecting their cultures. By

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mean

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, the

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can be protected without worrying too much about the potential effect of allowing

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to expand and to accept as many

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as possible. In conclusion, there is no

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in

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world that has no potential danger of being ruined,

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may or may not be one of those causes.

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, what really matters is how the preserver of the

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and how the

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of a

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reacts.

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, the ultimate goal of preserving a

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can be fulfilled.