Some people believe that the expansion of tourism is ruining the culture of a country, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting a culture. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is

this

debate over whether the problem of expanding

tourism

will end up destroying the

culture

of a

country

or preserving it. Before throwing our

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so fast, we should consider the situation rationally. Personally, in

this

ever-changing world, I believe that neither of them would happen

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the expansion of

tourism

, as long as the

government

takes action in the right way. On the one hand, no

culture

can be preserved better without letting others know about it. The essence of

tourism

is not only about showcasing the uniqueness of one's

culture

to that of the

tourists

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but

also

about letting the world know there are certain special things that are worth the

tourists

to visit and feel about them.

For example

, in China, there are 56 ethnic minorities living in different regions of the

country

, yet if the

tourists

don't go there and travel,

then

the cultural heritage of those

people

would be hidden under silence.

Also

, the expansion of

tourism

would give the opportunity to the local residents a second chance of employment in those areas. By doing so, it will simply boost the economy. So, the

government

should try their best to regulate the rules and better serve the

tourists

as well as

better

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their local

culture

.

On the other hand

, the probability of expanding

tourism

may end up destroying the nature of certain cultures. Generally speaking, the vast majority of the

people

in a

country

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do have their own beliefs that they have been holding for centuries. So, it is their duty to preserve those beliefs from being forgotten and left behind.

For instance

, in Kazakhstan,

people

believe that the increasing number of

tourists

will ruin their

belief

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,

however

, it certainly did. The increasing number of

tourists

did affect the way those

people

do things in their daily

life

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. They feel that making money is what success really means and many

people

end up not doing what they have been preserving. So, the

government

has the responsibility to do what is expected of their citizens by protecting their cultures. By

this

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, the

culture

can be protected without worrying too much about the potential effect of allowing

tourism

to expand and to accept as many

tourists

as possible. In conclusion, there is no

culture

in

this

world that has no potential danger of being ruined,

tourism

may or may not be one of those causes.

However

, what really matters is how the preserver of the

culture

and how the

government

of a

country

reacts.

Finally

, the ultimate goal of preserving a

culture

can be fulfilled.