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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.
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The line graph illustrates the differences in three various regions of crime(burglary,
car
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theft
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,
robbery
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) in Manchester city
center
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 between 2003 and 2012.
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, it is clearly seen from the graph that the lowest
point
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 was
robbery
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,
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, in the second place was burglary, and the
last
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 one and highest
point
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 was
car
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theft
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. Let's start with
robbery
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. First of all, the starting
point
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 was about 520 in 2003 and it rose gradually,
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 its peak in 2005 (approximately 590). It plunged to its lowest 500 in 2008, next
robbery
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 peaked at 530 in 2010 and
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 it ended at 520 in 2012. When looking at
the
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car
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theft
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, it is noticeable that
car
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theft
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 overtook about 2400 in 2003 and it decreased sharply
with
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 2000 in 2006,
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 it grew rapidly to nearly 2600 in 2010.
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, it experienced an upward of almost 2750 in 2012.
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, two of
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the crime
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 types
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 as, burglary and
robbery
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both
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of
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them
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witnessed its lowest
point
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 in 2008.
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