The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.
The line graph illustrates the differences in three various regions of crime(burglary,
car
theft
,
robbery
) in Manchester city
center
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between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
, it is clearly seen from the graph that the lowest
point
was
robbery
,
then
, in the second place was burglary, and the
last
one and highest
point
was
car
theft
. Let's start with
robbery
. First of all, the starting
point
was about 520 in 2003 and it rose gradually,
reached
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its peak in 2005 (approximately 590). It plunged to its lowest 500 in 2008, next
robbery
peaked at 530 in 2010 and
finally
it ended at 520 in 2012. When looking at
the
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car
theft
, it is noticeable that
car
theft
overtook about 2400 in 2003 and it decreased sharply
with
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2000 in 2006,
then
it grew rapidly to nearly 2600 in 2010.
As a result
, it experienced an upward of almost 2750 in 2012.
Therefore
, two of
crime
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types
such
as, burglary and
robbery
both
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of
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them
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witnessed its lowest
point
in 2008.
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