The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.

The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.
The graph below illustrates
cyclation
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the cyclation
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of
water
in
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on
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3 levels of the earth's surface.
Overall
, the 3 main stages are shown on the diagram, consisting of
water
evaporation from the
ocean
, rainfalls, and
finally
Add a comma
finally,
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water
runs back to the
ocean
again. looking at the details,
water
in the
ocean
evaporates and its condensed form creates clouds in the air(
which
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apply
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80%of their
water
is taken from the
ocean
), after that, precipitation occurs
due to
formation
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the formation
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of clouds in either snow or rain formats. snow takes
o=place
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place
in the
montains
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mountains
while
rains fall in the lakes,
then
, waters in the lakes go underground and
creat
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create
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groundwater, snow in the
montains
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mountains
gradually runs down in
water
form and join the underground
water
,
finally
, the salty underground
water
( because of the procedures which it
hase
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has
undergone it is salty) goes back to the
ocean
through 2 ways that connect the
ocean
to the underground.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, ocean with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evaporation
  • transpiration
  • condensation
  • precipitation
  • aquifers
  • percolation
  • surface runoff
  • replenishing
  • infiltrates
  • atmosphere
  • vapor
  • liquid
  • cycle
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