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Some people say that it is a waste of time to plan for the future and that it is more important to focus on the present. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that
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planning for the
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 is a waste of time, and
instead
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, people should concentrate more on the present because it is vital. I completely agree with the given statement because it allows us to pay more
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 the given tasks, leading us to
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victory, and
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 us build a successful career. The primary reason why we should
focus
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 on the present is to allow ourselves to perform the tasks that are
on-hands
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 with the highest possible
attention
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. It
also
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 leads us
achieve
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excellence in whatever we do if we stay more
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focus
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.
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 of
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the mind
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does
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not only gives us achievement by excelling in what we do
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 but
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 safeguards the
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, it is seen that most successful people always stay focused, offering
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 level of
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 what they do. Another reason is that we cannot control the
future
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, but we can secure it by focusing more on the present. If we keep planning for the upcoming years and do not pay due
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 the day-to-day activities, we simply cannot have
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 better
future
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, the present leads us to the
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 so building a better career for the days to come, staying
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focus
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 on the present is far more important.
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, those who often worry about the
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 are more likely to fail because they cannot stay focused.
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, I think that planning is a waste of time and we ought to stay
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focus
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 on the now. In conclusion, even though
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planning for the
future
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 seems necessary, it is imperative to
focus
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 present because it leads us
achieve
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to achieve
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an
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excellence in whatever we are given to do, leading to safeguarding the
future
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. Since we cannot control the
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we can build it by focusing on the present.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • focus on the present
  • wasting time
  • planning for the future
  • present moment
  • long-term goals
  • career advancements
  • personal development
  • financial stability
  • satisfaction and happiness
  • fully engaging
  • immediate circumstances
  • lack of preparedness
  • potential challenges
  • balanced approach
  • pragmatic solution
  • present experiences
  • paving the way
  • impulsive decisions
  • clearer direction
  • anticipate risks
  • mitigate
  • secure and stable future
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