Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: - recommend a city •    suggest a few jobs that your friend could do •    give some opinions about making friends with the locals.

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Dear Dhruvi, I hope you are doing well and excited to stay here in India for six months.
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, congratulations on getting your work visa. To be honest, I think that you should settle in either Mumbai or Bangalore as these are vibrant cities.
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this
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, both of these cities are growing at an unprecedented rate in every aspect. In India, currently, there is a lot of emphasis on combining Artificial Intelligence in the field of Mechanical Engineering, and these types of roles are always going to be in high demand.
Therefore
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, I think you should focus on roles
such
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as Application Specialist, Product Engineer and Design Engineer to leverage your education, skills and experience. From my knowledge and experience of these cities, I think making friends will be a piece of cake for you
due to
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your extroverted personality and its open culture. I cannot explain in words how excited I am to see you in my home country. See you soon. Warm wishes, Ruchin Patel

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Consider providing more specific details or examples about the cities to enrich your recommendation.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the transition between ideas for smoother flow, perhaps by linking the recommendation of cities to their job opportunities more clearly.
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The letter has a warm and inviting tone, which is suitable for a personal letter.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is generally logical, making it easy to follow your points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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