The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

 

 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph
depict
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the Copper , nickel and Zinc prices
varies
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montly
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monthly
during
year
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2014.
Over all
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,
it is clear that
all
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three metal prices
fluctuates
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.
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How ever
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in the month of June all metal
have
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negative
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percentage Nickel starts
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6 % in the month of January , drastically
decline
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till June and after that
plateaued
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for 3 months
July
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from July
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to August With -1 % and
rise
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to 2%
in
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end
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of the year .
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, Copper has fluctuated
through out
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the year ,
begin
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with
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a 2%fall
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2%fall
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2 %fall
down till March around -0.5 % , steady for a month and
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back to approximately 1.5 %in December.
For zinc
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Zinc
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begin
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from mid of February
with
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3
percent
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per cent
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and had
decrease
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a decreasing
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trend till June -1%
remain
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stagnant from July to September
with
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-0.5 % and
peak
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to
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2% by December as highest among
three
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the three
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metals in 2014
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