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The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004.

The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004.
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the two diagrams illustrate how much
water
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 was consumed and used in Australia in 2004.
Overall
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, There was a large proportion of
water
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 consumption by Residential houses which came mostly from gardens and bathrooms.
Conversely
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, the lowest data was in the government and other sectors,
while
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 kitchen and toilet were seen the least usage in residential areas. the number of
water
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 consumption in residential areas was highest at 57%, compared to around 3-6% the lowest figure for the government and other sectors.
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 the same proportion was seen in Business, Industry, and apartments at 11%. In the data for
water
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 usage in residential places, we witnessed the two largest figures for Bathroom and Garden which at around 27%, followed by exactly 20% in washing clothes.
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, the figures for toilet and kitchen are 15% and 10% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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