The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The first pie chart illustrates an average Australian household’s usage of
energy
in percentage. The second chart shows the percentages of the greenhouse gas
emissions which are
result from Unnecessary verb
apply
energy
use. Overall
, it can be seen that energy
usage of heating accounts for the biggest section in Australian households' energy
use. In contrast
, gas
emission from water heating shows the highest percentage which is 32%.
For household energy
use, the least
two are cooling and lighting which are 2% and 4% respectively. Correct your spelling
last
Furthermore
, refrigeration consumption is 7% which is less than other appliances by 8 percent. The second largest accounting is water heating energy
that
is 30 percent.
Correct pronoun usage
which
On the other hand
, gas
emission from cooling is the lowest in greenhouse gas
emissions which is 3%. Subsequently
, the second lowest one is lighting which is less than refrigeration by 6 percent. And then
, gas
emissions of
heating and other appliances account for 15% and 28% respectively.Change preposition
from
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