Write about a long and interesting journey you have made (140–180 words). Answer the questions: When wasit andwhere were you going? Howdid you travel? Howlong did it take? What wasit like? What made it interesting? Whodid you meet?

The most interesting trip was the honeymoon for me. We were in Thailand,
stayed
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in the city of Pattaya for 10 days. I was interested in their culture,
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and how
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they
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, and tried to make the most of their memory. I visited a long-necked women's village,
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the Buddha temple and golden monument,
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the most famous show of transvestites. My husband and I tried Thai massages on ourselves, and they can not be compared to Thai massage, which is done in Almaty. Еhere was a case when we went on a tour of the islands by boat, I felt sick and everything was expensive, and
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a couple from Russia met us on the boat, they gave me medicine, but it turned out that I was seasick.I
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liked the street food, freshly squeezed juices, banana pancakes and all that. I want to visit
this
city again and relax with my family.
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structure
Try starting with an introduction that sets the scene for your journey, mentioning the destination and purpose succinctly.
conclusion
An effective conclusion summarizing your experiences or reflecting on the journey's impact could enhance your essay.
cohesion
To improve coherence, link ideas and paragraphs more smoothly with transition words or phrases.
structure
Maintain a consistent narrative flow by organizing experiences chronologically or thematically.
depth
Consider elaborating on specific examples or experiences to further support your main points.
content
You’ve provided a variety of experiences, making your story engaging.
detail
Your essay includes specific examples that vividly bring your journey to life.
engagement
Introduction of personal interactions adds depth to your narrative.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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