In many countries around the world , rural people are moving to cities ,so the population in the country side is decreasing Do you think it is a positive or a negative development
In
this
contemporary world , it has been observed that rural individuals are migrating to urban cities which leads to decline
Correct article usage
a decline
population
in the countryside . There are Change preposition
in population
myriad
of benefits Add an article
a myriad
as well as
drawbacks of shifting to towns .Both the proms
and cons are elaborated Correct your spelling
pros
in
the Change preposition
on in
ensuring
paragraph .
On the one hand , Correct your spelling
ensuing
first
and foremost advantage is Add an article
the first
a first
better
quality of life Add an article
a better
the better
as well as
opportunity
for employment and students . Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
For instance
, most of the multinational companies are located with in
the town,which Correct your spelling
within
able
to find better work and Add a missing verb
is able
also
education
institutions for Replace the word
educational
children's
. Change noun form
children
Furthermore
, better road
and transportation like metro rails which Fix the agreement mistake
roads
makes
Verb problem
allow
people
to reach their destination
quickly and safely .
Fix the agreement mistake
destinations
On the other hand
,there are some disadvantages, Change the article
a numerous
the numerous
numerous
number of Correct word choice
large
people
moving to urban makes
Verb problem
areas is
overcrowded
because of a lot of Correct pronoun usage
it overcrowded
people
with
Change preposition
in
on
area.Correct your spelling
one
Addition
to that , traffic and air pollution affect the air quality . Change preposition
In addition
For example
, In India , a state called Delhi , due to
capital
all the Correct article usage
the capital
people
started migrating to city
which leads to poor air quality Correct article usage
the city
Correct word choice
and causes
causes
breathing problems for infants to old age Wrong verb form
caused
people
.Moreover
, Add an article
the country
country side
will not develop Correct your spelling
countryside
due to
people
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
relocating
to the cities Wrong verb form
relocate
also
leads to inequality among people
.
To conclude
,there are both merits and demerits of the people
relocating to urban cities.Government
should develop Correct article usage
The government
the
rural Correct article usage
apply
area
with better facilities to Fix the agreement mistake
areas
decline
Verb problem
reduce
population
in rural.Correct article usage
the population
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