Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some people thi it that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives through sporting events such as Olympics and World cups. Others think that there are better ways to encourage adults to do exercise. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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adults
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fewer sport
in their
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daily
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daily
life,on the one side, people think that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives it is because
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olympics
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and
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world
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cups
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.the other sides think that there
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other ways to encourage
adults
to do
sport
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activities. Some
peoplr
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people
think when
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adult
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adults
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watching
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the
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sporting
evrnt
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event
events
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tv
then
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adults
will have
desire
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to go outside and
doing
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exercise.
Adults
will inspire
with
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the athlete.
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,some of them
believether
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believe they
believe there
are
better
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way to let
adults
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do
sport
instead
of staying at home. in my view,i account the best
ways
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to encourage
adults
to
do
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exercise is
set
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up more gym
room
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intheir
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in their
work space.it is because
,
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most of the
adults
are busy.They don't have
work life
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balance in their
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daily
life.when they have time they just want to stay at home.
however
, if build up more facilities in their
work place
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and near their house. It is easy to go and nourish their exercise habit .The
adults
will
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it.
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