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The graph shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over in major developed countries.

The graph shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over in major developed countries.
This
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 graph illustrates the citizens aged 65 or higher in three different countries.
Overall
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, the population of Japan has the most increased of elderly people throughout the 100 years,
while
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 the populations of the other two countries had a similar jump between 1940 to 1990. On the one hand, the elder citizens of Japan began at 5% in 1940 and slightly decreased to around 2% in 1980.
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, the population have risen dramatically to 27%
at the end
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 of 2040.
In other words
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, Sweden and the USA began at around 7% and 9%, respectively, and jumped
similarly
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 to 1990 that are 13% and 14%. The population of the USA will be steady until 2020 and hit a peak at approximately 23% in 2040. The citizens of Sweden will fluctuate until 2030 and rise around 22% in 2040.

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Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • aged 65 and over
  • depicted
  • population
  • changes
  • span of 100 years
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